Friday, March 02, 2007

Friday Word

As per Mona, the friday word is "Hide". I apparently have trouble doing that from this place, despite my last post about being away. Yes I am away in some ways and not in others.

Flowing in a torrent
Fingers dancing in a manic rhythm
Crystals formed from distillates of memories
Jagged edges penetrating consciousness
Mangled.. tangled into knots of hell
Words that wanted to hide
As he tried to form them
They no longer wanted to feel what he felt
That would be his lonesome burden to bear
From this day on there would be words no more
Leaving behind a silent cacophony…


Mona Buonanotte said...

This is lovely and hard and sure can wind up pretty words, Jay!

Maggie said...

Sanjay, your poetry matures and the words are weaving around their subjects like little secrets...I like it.

starry nights said...

Sanjay..loved your poem. awesome.You have a way with words.

Aditi said...

nicely done.. yet something dark hiding in those words.. or maybe just what i saw..

Carrie said...

That was really good.

meno said...

Nicely done Mister.

Sai said...

Such a lovely poem. your posts move me to tears...very intense.

Lotus Reads said...

Beautifully written, Sanjay...some of the lines just tugged at my heartstrings...

Words that wanted to hide
As he tried to form them
They no longer wanted to feel what he felt
That would be his lonesome burden to bear

Sad, but lovely. You should write more poetry, you're darned good at this!

Fuzzylogic said...

Wow,beautifully written.

Shitrint said...

aah...this is a nice poem!
is this abt u in some way?
take care!

Sanjay said...

@Mona..Thanks, sheer luck I tell ya.

@Maggie..Thank you. I liked how you described it.

@Starry. Thanks much, the process does not always work for me, words that is.

@Aditi. Thks, it is a secret. :)

@Carrie.. Thanks.



@Lotus. Thank you much. The thing is the poems rarely come by design, sometimes they just happen.

@Fuzzylogic.. Thanks.

@Trinnie..Thanks. Is this about me? It could be right? It could be about any of us. :)

Teri said...

That is really good poetry! Encore! Bravo!

MONA said...

very emotive..just the task a poetry is supposed to do..get a huge wave of feelings into a crux in a crucible. :)
Ps: did you read some of mine from the archives?

Today is Holi...Happy Holi to you & your family.May your life be filled with a rainbow of colors!
Havent posted lately..but your poem reminds me of one of mine...with one word there..I think I shall put it up there, for all the bloggers...before my usual memoirs long post :)

Nabeel said...

surely, hell won't be a good place to hide .. why are you hiding? hiding is different than taking a break I guess .. i guess u wanna do the latter.

Shitrint said...

Happy Holi Sanjay!
Have fun!

Enyur said...

Beautifully written :-)

deepsat said...

loved those words sanjay!!


Aditi said...

never thought otherwise.. but words said with a smile seem reassuring...
Happy Holi!!